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Not enough people realise the importance of natural world. What is the reason for people’s lack of awareness? How can people be made more aware?

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It is believed that people nowadays are unaware of natural resources and had forgotten the significance of them. There seem to be two main causes
involved and
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involved, and
 several possible solutions as we will discuss.
Firstly
, the main reason for
unfamiliarity
Suggestion
the unfamiliarity
 of natural resources is possibly the choices of people are predominantly changed.
Similarly
, people in the past were more interested in living in the countryside and in order to flourish their agricultural development, taking responsibility to save natural elements
such
 as land, wild-forestry and water bodies as these rewards go beyond material considerations. While
in contrast
, all
this
 has been lost because of
industrial revolution
Suggestion
the industrial revolution
 as the emissions from cars, factories and other human activities contain damaging pollutant particles, leading to contaminate rainwater run-off by entering through water tables into aquifers, streams and rivers. The other major cause is mass dumping of waste products in places outside of controlled landfills or waste processing
centers
an area that is approximately central within some larger region
centres
, resulting in various diseases and polluting the overall climate of the biosphere. Turning to possible solutions, government and international organizations could play a key role in educating people
such
 as global warming and from other disastrous events.
Consequently
, subsidizing environmental friendly products
such
 as electric cars to reduce
smoke
Suggestion
smoking
, and better dumping solution for domestic and industrial waste can bring
this
 world to a point free from environmental issues.
Similarly
, people could learn the importance of animal husbandry, methods of farming
such
 as crop rotation and irrigation and generally may become more in tune with the natural world. In
this
 manner, individuals with the least resources would be able to counter the environmental effects.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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