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Many developing countries are currently expanding their tourist industries. Why is this the case? Is it a positive or negative development?

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Nowadays,
tourism
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 is
one
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 of the fastest growing and most dynamic industries in the global economy, especially in emergent nations because of its enormous advantages. It is argued that these countries should control the extension of
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 industry while others believe that
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 enlargement is necessary and inevitable in today’s international integration phase. I agree with the
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 opinion. On the
one
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 hand,
tourism
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 results in negative influences
on
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of
 environment. The rapid
development
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 of
tourism
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 implicates the spread of urbanization, deforestation and overpopulation,
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 causing the greenhouse effect and the imbalance on ecosystems, biodiversity and human livelihoods.
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, the massive potential benefits from tourist industry is obviously undeniable;
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,
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development
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 is certainly positive.
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,
tourism
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 has a significant contribution to the growth of
economy
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the economy
. With the diverse consumption of goods, services
from
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for
 visitors, national income and taxes are increased.
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, many countries take advantage of tourist industry
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 to attract investment in upgrading infrastructures, services, facilities and investors
finds
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find
 various opportunities to make benefits vice versa.
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, the people’s living standard is visibly improved, especially the local people. There are numerous jobs created to cater for tourists worldwide.
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, the unemployment has been sharply dropped
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from
 years. To take a proven illustration, Sapa is an attractive
mountainous
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mountain
 destination of Vietnam, charming a huge number of domestic and international arrivals yearly. Despite the fact that the majority of
population
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the population
 here is ethnic minorities, people can make money easily through selling hand-made souvenirs, building
homestays
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Homestays
on
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for
 hire, especially being a tourist guide with impressive English ability
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Accept space
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etc
continuing in the same way
etc.
.
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, the expansion of
tourism
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 creates
favorable
encouraging or approving or pleasing
favourable
 conditions for historical and cultural exchange and preservation of each nation. Each area has its own featured culture and formation and
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 history which
draw
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draws
 visitors aside to explore. Travelling to different lands, tourists can experience and spread the locals’ habits, thinking, custom, history...
etc.
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Etc.
 It is un-exaggerated that
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 of the most effective methods to advertise
one
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 country is through
tourism
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. In conclusion,
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 there are still many contrary opinions in
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 extension, if the government has suitable
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 policies to restrain its disadvantages,
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 tendency is
one
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 of the top-wise choices and strategic
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 goals of the growing nations.

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