Some people believe money is best gift for teenagerswhiel others disagree.discuss both views

Chips and coins are the most powerful thing for everyone,
nomatter
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no matter
which age group they belong to.Scores of people have faith in that youngsters should be given handsome amount as a present on their special days and
occassions
something you have to do
occasions
while on the other side of rope
,
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,
some folks believe in that giving banknotes is not a good idea
to
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for
the young
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younger
children.
this
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This
essay will particularize and reel
off
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of
the facts and finding on the advantages and disadvantages of the money on the children.
the
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The
latter part of the essay will reveal with
few examples
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a few examples
that support my opinion that the young people
shouldnot
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should not
be given
cash
as their present. In
this
modern era
,
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,
solid
cash
can bring the sky down.
as
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As
a matter of fact
,
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,
teenagers are more prone to the evil deeds of society because they are not able to
discrimnate
recognize or perceive the difference
discriminate
what is good for them and what could drag them into real trouble.
on
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On
the one hand
,
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,
giving presents is always momentous and impartial for our children
,
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,
it brings them the
care
a small group of indispensable persons or things
core
feeling we have for them.
on
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On
the contrary
,
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,
when
uncle
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an uncle
or aunt gives
cash
to a youngster
,
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,
he can buy whatever he
want
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wants
meanwhile he can go for
alchol
a liquor or brew containing alcohol as the active agent
alcohol
drugs etc. Despite
,
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,
if he would have been given a tablet or mobile phone it will keep him attached to the family tree as well as it will stay longer with him to create a strong bond in
family
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the family
.
On the other hand
,
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,
cash
in
hands
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the hands
of young
child
is risky and can lead to
series
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a series
of problems. What can do harm to my
child
with just 1000
rs
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Rs
rows
??
its
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It's
Its
not about the amount its about opening the doors for him. In my opinion
,
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,
giving money is not a good idea.
adults
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Adults
find it
more easy
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easier
easiest
to give but if in the long
run we
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run, we
think about it may be the
child
who looks so innocent at home have a bad company who are doing drugs, but he
couldnot
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could not
give it a try as a matter of fact he never had
cash
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the cash
.
after
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After
ellaborating
marked by complexity and richness of detail
elaborating
elaboration
this
fact do we really
handover
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hand over
dollars to our son or daughter??
the
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The
answer is definitely no.
rather
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Rather
than
this
if
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
get him a new watch whenever he look at it
,
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,
will bring the good lasting memories of family gathering on his graduation day or birthday.
Furthermore
,
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,
teenage is very labile prone age for all the influences.
every
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Every
child
have
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has
his own mindset to perceive the surroundings.
to
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To
make it more lucid
,
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,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
would conclude the discussion with like for a
child
aged 20 years when given
cash
might think of that
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
havenot
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have not
tried a cigarette because mum never gave me luxury of 1000
rs
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Rs
yrs
rows
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
should get one smoke
,
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,
on the other side of rope
,
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,
another
boys
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boy
might think that he have 2000
rs
a period of time containing 365 (or 366) days
yrs
already saved with him with
this
additive amount he can buy himself the Brumano trouser.
so
to a very great extent or degree
So
its quite two different opinions of same age group
boys but
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boys, but
one can be really injurious effects while
other
plural of other; the people or things not already mentioned
others
have nothing to do just the
instagram
phot
pointing out something
that
fame he wants.
so
to a very great extent or degree
So
,
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,
we
shouldnot
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should not
give money to teenagers because they are unpredictable about how they will use their gift bad way or
good way
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a good way
.
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