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The development of tourism contributes to English becoming the most prominent language in the world. Some people think this will lead to English becoming the only language to be spoken globally. What are the advantages and disadvantages to have one language in the world and give your opinion?

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As
tourism industry
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the tourism industry
 is gaining more attention, according to some English
language
 will become the only verbal communicative way around the world. While single spoken
language
 can damage other cultures massively,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 believe that it will bring more financial gains by making interaction easy.

 The main drawback of English becoming single interactive
language
 is that it will harm other cultures.
This
 is because, people will no longer have the interest to practice their own
language
 rather than English.
As a result
, they will lose contact with their native culture and will lose connection with their heritage. In
this
process they
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process, they
 suffer from identity
crisis which
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crisis, which
 will massively hurt their art and film industry.
Nevertheless
, one
communication
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communication, language
language
 will lead to easy access to different countries and can lead to massive financial gain. Having one communication method will make
interaction
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the interaction
 much easier. In
this
 era of globalization if a country
want
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wants
 to improve their business, they must need to interact with other country effectively.
This
 is because, the underdeveloped and developing countries are earning revenues through exporting goods to developed countries.
For example
, the GDP growth of Bangladesh was 7% in 2019 due to the fact that they have exported a massive amount of garments to Canada and
this
 become possible as they introduced English as a
second
language
 in their country.
This
 is a clear indication
that how same
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how that same
 verbal
language
 can contribute
in
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to
 a
countries
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country's
 economy.

 In conclusion,
Although
 one
language
 can harm a
nations
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nation's
 culture,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 believe that it brings
much
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many
 financial advantages which can lead to prosperity.
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  • Prominent
  • Contribute
  • Global
  • Advantages
  • Disadvantages
  • Communication
  • Understanding
  • Ease
  • Business
  • Trade
  • Cultural exchange
  • Unity
  • Access
  • Information
  • Simplify
  • Travel
  • Tourism
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