You are a student at a language school in New Zealand studying Business English. Part of the course is a summer work placement programme. Unfortunately, you have just learnt from the school that this programme has now been cancelled. Write a letter to the School Principal. In your letter: state your reason for writing describe the problem and your concerns explain what you would like the Principal to do.

Dear Sir/Madam, I am Kevin Jonas studying Business English at your school
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1
year
. I am writing
this
letter under concern regarding the summer work placement programme, which has been cancelled for
this
year
. I was astonished when I heard
this
information and I am really worried
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my future. I was really dependant upon
this
summer work placement as I have taken
loan
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for my studies and I have to pay
bank
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of it by the coming
next
two years. Now, I am really concerned about paying my debts as
this
year
summer placement is cancelled by the institution.
Also
, I am not from
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wealthy family background, so I have to take care of my younger siblings as well
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because my father got retired
this
year
from his job. Now, I not only have
responsibility
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of
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my siblings, but I have to take care
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needs of my parents
also
. I request you to please consider my problems and through your contacts let me know about any job I can do so that I can take care of my family. Looking forward
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your prompt response. Your's faithfully, Kevin Jonas
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

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Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

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