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All cars that burn fossil fuel should be banned and electric cars should replace them. Do you agree or disagree?

#cars #fuel
Technology is growing, but natural substances cannot be made using it.
Thus
, I agree cars that run on
fuel
 should be discontinued as they discharge lots of harmful gases and is a playing a big role in
depletion
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the depletion
 of fossils around the globe.
Firstly
, burning of
fuel
 from Motor vehicle produces lots of gases which are not good for
environment
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the environment
, as one of the major gas that emits out is
CO2 which
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CO2, which
 is harmful in many ways to humans which leads to ozone depletion above USA whereas electric cars have no
such
 side effects. For illustration, all major cities in the world are facing
issue
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issues
an issue
 related to smog because of the pollution present in the downtown due to traffic and cars, one
such
 example is Delhi.
Secondly
, the rate at which fossil is reducing there won’t be any left in years to come. It is majorly used to convert to Petrol and diesel which is used to power engines used in cars.
Therefore
, rather than using fossil to power motors it should be used to generate
electricity which
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electricity, which
 will power the electric cars which are less harmful to the environment.
For example
, many big companies’ campus has stopped using vehicles that run on
fuel
instead
 they prefer electric types. To conclude, there are enough advantages to use Electric based cars
instead
 of
fuel
 driven ones, as it helps
environment and contribute the
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the environment and contribute to the
the environment and contribute the
 sustainability of the planet.

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