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With internet improvements, people can share views or opinions on certain goods or services that they have purchased. Is this a good or a bad thing? Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Owing to the advancements in the internet, most of the e-commerce sites these days provide a facility for the users to share their feedback about the products they have purchased.
Although
this
 can sometimes misguide the consumers, in my perspective, it is beneficial as it helps the buyers to check the credibility of the
product
. Admittedly, the facility of
online reviewing system
Suggestion
the online reviewing system
an online reviewing system
 is misused by many producers. The reason for
this
 is, in order to increase the sales of the items they make use of fake positive reviews and opinions which many times misguide the consumers. As most of the end-users prefer to buy the goods with more rating and positive feedback. To exemplify, a start-up mobile company 'Juno' fooled thousands of people throughout India with the help of misleading and false reviews of their non-smart and low-quality mobile phones.
Nevertheless
, despite the aforementioned drawback, sharing of opinions on the goods purchased online is advantageous as it can provide a better insight into the
product
 quality. With
this
 platform people who have already bought the item can openly share their good or bad experience of using that
product
.
Consequently
,
this
 will not only help the other buyers to analyse the effectiveness of the item, but
also
 make the selection of
product
Suggestion
the product
products
 easy for them.
For instance
, in the global ranking of the end-user facilities provided by the e-commerce sites, Amazon's rating facility on each good and service is ranked
first
, as it facilitates the users to buy the best item. In conclusion, while there are some instances where an unauthorized feedback system can be misleading, in my opinion, the overall review system is a benefit for the end-users as it allows them to analyse the quality of goods.
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