Today more and more tourists are visiting places where conditions are difficult, such as the Sahara desert or the Antarctic. What are the benefits and disadvantages for tourists who visit such places?

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, every moment. And not just a world.When
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us
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too
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the
first
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people always have
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about
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other
culture
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and the other
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.
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curious what would
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?
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we have a lot of different
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for
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the new world. Thanks for the high technology.If you want you be able to visit the world’s coldest continent.Or maybe you can climb the world’s highest mountain.
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of cake!
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It’s more thriller than the regular ancient cities. If you
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take
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hesitate.You have a chance to
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local food,
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the
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life in hard
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. Indeed if you don’t have
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enough save for
this
trip.You can find
also
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for
this
one.Just you need to want it.And contact with
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company. Those are benefits for us. How many people might
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have seen the desert or Amazon?
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could be
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adventure for you and your family. But
also
like everything in life,
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extreme excursions have
a negative sides
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. You might get
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sick when you are in
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or
broken
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your leg when you try climbing a mountain.But
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I support
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extreme tours.If we
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take precautions before starting the journey
you
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don’t need to be afraid
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those bad issues and sickness.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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