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Nowadays companies and other organisations are requiring their employees to wear a uniform. What is your viewpoint on this? What are the advantages and disadvantages of wearing a uniform? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience

In recent years, wearing
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uniform
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a uniform
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 in the
work place
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workplace
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 has become
the
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 widely debated topic across the globe. Employers feel
this
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as
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 a
pre-requisite
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. In my opinion, I think that wearing
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uniform
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a uniform
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 can bring about more benefits compared to any disadvantages it might bring. There are a colossal number of positives for companies
as well as
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 individuals. The most conspicuous one is that
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uniform
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uniformity
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 brings equality among employees ranging from
lower level
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lower-level
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 to
top level
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top-level
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 management and gives a feeling of oneness, irrespective of their social status and designations.
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, proper clothing at
workplace
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the workplace
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 is
been
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treated as
a
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apply
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safety equipment in heavy industries like
automobile
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the automobile
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, oil and gas
because
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industries because
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 of the risk which is involved
while
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 working under
machineries
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machinery
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. Another obvious merit of the above trend is that
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 it helps
organizations
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organisations
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 with free branding. To illustrate, employees of different companies from the same industry present in a global conference will notice the
uniform
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,
thus
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increase
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 the popularity of the company and sales of the product.
However
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, there are some problems people must undergo with the
uniform
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. The primary one is the issue of
comfortability
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comfort
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. Individuals feel that sometimes it is hard to wear
improper
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an improper
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 design for the whole day,
results
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resulting
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 in stress
which
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 may hinder the performance of an employee.
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, they think that
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 it prevents the uniqueness of a staff among the crowd. Another point to consider is that
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 it may sometimes become a burden to employers if they
had
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have
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 to provide uniforms and for employees if they need to spend from their
pocket
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own pocket
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.
To conclude
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,
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 in the
work place
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workplace
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 will certainly improve the relationship between subordinates and increase the morale of the company
and
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, and
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 the negative aspects can be accommodated with merits in the long run.

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structure
Plan a tight idea for each paragraph: 1) view, 2) plus points, 3) minus points, 4) final stand.
grammar
Fix small grammar and word use, like 'is been' and 'uniform in the work place' to 'in the workplace' or 'wearing a uniform'.
style
Keep to short and clear sentences. This helps easy read.
content
Add one clear real example from life or work to show a point.
structure
Clear view at the start and a final view.
coherence
Some good linking words to join ideas.
content
The essay talks about both sides and gives a plan.
Fully explain your ideas

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • unity
  • team spirit
  • dress code
  • professional appearance
  • confidence
  • clients
  • brand identity
  • recognizable
  • individuality
  • personal expression
  • uncomfortable
  • impractical
  • financial burden
  • resistance
  • dissatisfaction
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