Buying things on the internet, such as books, air tickets, and groceries is becoming more and more popular. Do the advantages of shopping in this way outweigh the disadvantages?

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Over the
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few years, online shopping becomes a top trend, as an increasing number of people buying goods and services through the internet. While there are some evident drawbacks of
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activity, I opine that the benefits of
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tendency are greater in numbers. The Internet has changed the way people purchasing goods and services. One obvious drawback of
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activity is the deliverance of poor quality materials.
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is because when the customer orders electronically, they might unable to physically inspect the quality and the quantity of the products, which is an essential part of trading, and
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could lead to a severe problem for them later on. To illustrate, there is ongoing litigation against eBay Incorporation about the delivery of expiry food, which caused serious injury to its customer.
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, the drawbacks, people are facing from e-commerce
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is overshadowed
by its advantages. One prominent benefit is people can save a considerable amount of time and effort by simply order their goods while sitting at home. The
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time, which
they save could be spent on other household activities.
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, people can buy products and services at a very competitive price.
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is usually because of
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an online store purchasing goods in bulk quantity from the factory at a fairly
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low
the lowest
price so that they can offer to their customers at a bargain price.
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, Amazon
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currently offers
is currently offering
their customer flat 50% discounts on books and other reading materials. In conclusion, while people still facing difficulties in respect of the quality of online products, I believe the drawbacks are eclipsed by it the benefits
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as time-saving and cost-effectiveness.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • convenience
  • time-saving
  • wide selection
  • competitive prices
  • discounts
  • accessibility
  • global marketplace
  • availability
  • fraud
  • scams
  • lack of
  • physical interaction
  • personal experience
  • impersonal
  • customer service
  • delays
  • delivery
  • return process
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