Some people believe that children are given too much free time.They feel that this time should be used to do more school work. How do you think children should spend their free time?

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Can you remember your childhood? Because
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want to ask some question for us.
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is mean
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playing with friends,
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or eating a lot of ice cream. Until starting the
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. All
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want to same thing for their children. The kid
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to be diligent, creative and willing at
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. Maybe not all of us but %51
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doing homework
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more vital than free
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for the child.
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me we are disagree
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point.Please think about your childhood.If we give
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just homework to our children how they can improve
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themselves? Following the rules for
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maybe can help to gain
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job.But is that enough? I assume the answer is no. As we
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, we need to balance
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.They could be using the
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. When they are doing their homework
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they have to increase their imagination. Just consider the old accomplished scientist, historian and mathematician.
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Da Vinci.He was a successful person. Why? Because he has got a different logic.He saw the different sides of everything
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of the rest of the world.
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they should take a lesson
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music, sport or
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, We should reveal their talent.And we have to support them for
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talent.The child
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learning something different from
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and he/she gonna be more happy and curious
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life.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • unstructured free time
  • creativity
  • mental health development
  • extracurricular activities
  • well-rounded development
  • sports
  • arts
  • social skills
  • family time
  • emotional growth
  • relationship building
  • rest and leisure
  • academic performance
  • burnout
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