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some people believe that taxing is best way to reduce the industrial pollution.While some suggest there are several other ways to solve this trouble. Discuss both the views and give you opinion.

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Industrialistion
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Industrialisation
,
nowdays
the period of time that is happening now; any continuous stretch of time including the moment of speech
nowadays
 has burgeoned at a rapid pace, leading to an enormous rise in the pollution.
To
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For
In
this
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 situation, certain section of
masses opine
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the masses opine
 that these industries should be heavily taxed, while others believe that there are more enhanced ways to tackle the pollutants caused by factories.
This
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 essay will discuss both the views before coming up with
an
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a
 logical conclusion. On one hand, the idea of taxing factories can cause a fear in the minds of the owners that if they are discharging any kind of hazardous
waste
Use synonyms
 out
,
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,
 they will be penalised in
form
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the form
 of hefty taxes.
Eventualy
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Eventually
, the tax will put a toll on their profit margin, eating a large share of their earnings.
Hence
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, they will develop
efficent
being effective without wasting time or effort or expense
efficient
 working conditions in order to reduce
th
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the
 pollutants being disposed out. To illustrate, Uttrakhand, a state of India has imposed 30% tax fine to regional factories for dumping
waste
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 in the river Ganga.
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, some people
wants
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want
 that industry should adopt efficient ways of working like use of renewable energy sources and eliminating the traditional ways of burning coal that causes carbon emissions into the air. They can install solar plants to generate electricity and any kind of heating process.
Moreover
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, dumping of the
waste
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 should be thoroughly examined and treated so that it do not cause any harm to the biodiversity.
Swtiching
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Switching
 to eco-friendly raw materials can
therefore
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 help in reducing harmful
waste
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 causing pollutants According to my perspective, taxing cannot help in lowering down the pollution rate as factories having high turnover revenues would not get affected by heavy taxes, whereas if they start adopting eco-
freindly
characteristic of or befitting a friend
friendly
 practices like
insatlling
the act of installing something (as equipment)
installing
 solar boilers and use of sustainable raw materials would impact more positively.
Consequently
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, they can be rewarded by the government for
this
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 kind of contributions towards society's betterment. To conclude, it is clear that focusing more on imposing tax fines on industries, they should be encouraged to adopt sustainable trade practices for diminishing pollutants and saving the mother nature from degradation
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