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Both poor and the rich find the accessibility into the university difficult. Do you agree or not?

#accessibility #university
It is argued that students often struggle to take
admission
 in the university regardless of their financial background. I completely agree with
this
 statement because the
merit
 of universities is relatively
high
Suggestion
higher
 than before, and they often offer a fixed
number
 of seats per academic session to meet standards of
quality
education
. Mostly universities intake students based on their throughout academic achievements and their performance in the entry test of the University. Which causes a constant increase in the
merit
 and only students with high score could be able to secure their admissions. Most universities don’t
weightage
weather
introduces two alternatives
whether
 the selected student belongs to a less privileged family or an affluent family. To illustrate, The JUNG has published the recent research only 20% of students per semester got the
admission
for
Suggestion
to
 post-graduation due to high
merit
. Those institutes that offer higher qualification fixed their
number
 of intake students to attain their motto of
quality
education
, though, the
number
 of students is increasing constantly over a few years educational institutes are more focused towards the
quality
 of the
education
 so their students could have an impact on society. They prefer to take fewer students so they could provide them with the best amenities in terms of
education
, research lab and opportunities
to publish
Suggestion
publish
 their work.
For example
, public sector universities fixed their intake to 60 students per program to meet the criteria of a student-teacher ratio which is 1:3 so faculty could put more attention. Financial background is not a consideration of universities anymore to give
admission
 to students
that is
 why every student is facing challenges of securing
admission
, because institutes are considering
merit
 as a parameter and they
also
 fixed the
number
 of seats to achieve
quality
.

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