Parents give more freedom to their children nowadays than they do in the past. Is this a negative or positive development. Answer with reasons and personal experiences......

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In today's scenario, from what I have observed is children are getting more freedom
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their parents as compared to what I have experienced personally. It is an interesting development as it does have both positive and negative aspects. What I believe, freedom
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certain extent is great, as a child feels more connected with their elders and are open to sharing anything and everything they experience or observe.
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way parents can always keep a track of their
whatabouts
the general location where something is
whereabouts
and
whereabouts which
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whereabouts, which
ultimately helps with respect to a child's security as well. When a child shares or wants to talk about any
subject whether
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subject, whether
academically or personally, a guardian can show him/her the right path or approach regarding it, or can help
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any other resources possible and available with them. Having said that, these
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day
day's
days'
expenses have increased. Every now and
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small toddlers want to go to some lavish place like resorts for day outings and overnight stay, just for having fun without realising how much one has to spend
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about
the same. Birthday parties have become a trend these days. Children from play school onwards want to go outdoor parties, movie theatres
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along with
their
friends which
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friends, which
can become tedious for parents too. One most common boon and a curse is technology and electronic devices like mobiles, tablets etc. One cannot do without them as
everything whether
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everything, whether
educational or uninstructive is easily available to everyone. While using it for benefits tags along its side effects too; most common being screen dependency disorder, which affects
brain leading
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brain, leading
to poor nutrition, insomnia, eyesight problems at a very tender age. To avoid these issues, parents must constrict their
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used of the younger of two persons of the same name especially used to distinguish a son from his father
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ones
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certain hours per week. If the hours are crossed, some infliction must be imposed,
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as, cleaning their room, making beds for all family members, cutting a penalty charge from their pocket money. Even the concept of pocket money has to be inculcated in them so that they learn the value of money, how to earn, when and where to spend. Freedom is sweet
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a certain level; too much of sweetness can even lead to diabetes. So I always believe prevention is better than cure.
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The required amount
of freedom will help build a
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child's
character strong and valuable.

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