Parents give more freedom to their children nowadays than they do in the past. Is this a positive or negative development? Answer with reasons and personal experiences

In recent times, parents allocate generous time
to
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with
their offspring than it was done in
the older
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the old
days. In my view, I believe
peer influence
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the peer influence
will impact negatively on children who are given excessive freewill.
To begin
with, parents giving their kids excess lack of restriction will lead to a negative development as a growing child’s mind is always curious. One of the reasons I believe
this
school of thought is because children
tend to copy from
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tend to copy
tend to copy of
what they see mostly.
For instance
, a network cable in Nigeria called DSTV shows different music channels. Unfortunately, the lyrics are filled with vulgar words and more so the picture depicts nudity. Children’s brain
undergo
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undergoes
development daily and whatever they hear or see get stuck
to
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in
memory which may lead to a child trying to grow into
uncontrolled character
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the uncontrolled character
if left unmonitored. Another point to consider is that when children are given too much liberty, they can be negatively influenced by their peers.
In other words
, kids left
unmonitored
with their fellow age groups may pick up certain
behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
displayed within their circle. Using Nigeria military barracks as an example, uniform parents who come from different background are often required to stay together within the force form a mini community. As
such
a family whose both parents are in the army may be required to resume at their duty post same time will leave their children with lots of free time. Undoubtedly, these children associate with many others whose moral view might be
opposing
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opposed
to their parents whereby giving them room to be influenced or convinced them to engage in
act
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activities
like taking hard drugs, smoking, stealing or sexual involvement. In conclusion, based on the reasons above, I believe that parents giving too much liberty to their wards will influence them negatively with regards to bad association.
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