Doctor, nurses and teacher make a great contribution to society and should be played more than entertainment and sport celebrity. Do you agree or disagree

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Hotly debatable issue
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The hotly debatable issue
today relates to that medical practitioner, carer and instructor play a major role in
society
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rather than entertainment and sport celebrity. When, ordinary and famous individual face the any disease like fever, headache
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, they
also
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more trust
to
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in
the doctor. I agree with
this
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statement and discuss both
point
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points
of view. On the one hand, there are numerous stunning benefits of profession
such
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as doctors, engineer and teacher. These include
enchanced
increased or intensified in value or beauty or quality
enhanced
honour, inequality and respect each other.
Firstly
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, there is no any doubt that students and people more than trust to do teachers or doctor and give
to respect
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respect
as compared to
other
any of various alternatives; some other
another
profession.
Moreover
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, now in
this
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era teacher huge impact on student
life
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to owing they
also
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teach the good lesson include
society
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and personal
life
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and which are more helpful for
learner
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learners
the learner
, with they achieve the own goal ambition through tutor lesson.
In addition
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, doctor like a god because they protect to the human
life
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without any trouble.
if
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If
they are not very affluent and
rich
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rich, then
then
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, they never keep the difference in
society
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for
this
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reason authority or people must be give pay more money as opposed to the film star.
On the other hand
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, there are
couple
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a couple
of drawbacks in both
profession
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professions
of comedian and superstar.
Secondly
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, in
moder
belonging to the modern era; since the Middle Ages
modern
world
to
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for
doing the job more stressed and hard work specifically entertainment and film industry.
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, celebrity people
also
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expand the violence in
public spot
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a public spot
the public spot
public spots
with which their fans give more attention and attract toward bad things. All in all, they
not teach
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don't teach
aren't teaching
the good lesson and help to the community.
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, tutor and
physician
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physicians
also
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more
opine
a clear or unobstructed space or expanse of land or water
open
and concerned about
society
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and give to the donation, free books for poor people and so on. In
concluded
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concluding
, it can be seen that whereas the all fields has brought over than advantages like away the financial nuisance and
they
of them or themselves
their
lives to the luxurious
life
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.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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