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Developing countries require international organization’s help. Some people prefer financial aid while others think practical aid and advice are better. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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There is little doubt that underdeveloped nations seek help from the world’s organizations;
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, the argument over whether they should assist in monetary terms, or send help using other means has not been settled yet.
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 essay will argue that
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 financial aid is imperative for the development of a country, I believe that technical guidelines and supervision are important. To embark with, in many progressing nations the sole hurdle in initiating a new project is lack of funds.
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 is to say that despite having the best medical practitioners in the health sector, to eradicate viral diseases like polio, hepatitis, a lot of investment is required to make vaccines against them. Without any external financial support, it is not possible to complete an unfinished or start a new program.
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, in these countries, corrupt politicians utilize
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 money for their personal agenda.
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, the developing nations should receive practical help rather than financial because the development programs are more prone to extortion and influence-peddling by the unfair officials.
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, in 2019, the United Nations have initiated a campaign to overcome hunger in India, in which they are sending their teams to the areas which are deprived of food with all basic necessities.
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, these teams get directions from their higher authorities, and they send a report on a weekly basis about the areas being covered so that the world ranking of India in hunger could be upgraded. To conclude, people may vary in their opinions, I believe that financial help is prone to corruption,
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 practical help and dictations are important.

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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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