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What are the benefits of living in big cities as opposed to rural areas.

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Since from the evolution of human beings there is a massive migration from rural areas to cities which we call it as "Urbanisation"
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 There are so many factors triggering the urbanisation. The most important thing is betterment of the individuals and their associated families. In
cities there
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cities, there
 are superior
opprotunities
a possibility due to a favorable combination of circumstances
opportunities
, effective health care and good educational institutions. People from remote areas will get better financial security by doing jobs which aren't easily located in the villages.
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Also, there
 are many
amusent
a feeling of delight at being entertained
amusement
 parks, movie
theaters
a building where theatrical performances or motion-picture shows can be presented
theatres
 and shows available in cities which are
entertaning
agreeably diverting
entertaining
entertain
 the people. There are even downsides of the urbanisation as well. Huge migration to cities beyond the
limt
the greatest possible degree of something
limit
limits
limited
 causes so many problems like pollution, water crisis, over population, steep increase of prices and so on. So the government should take the precautionary measures to avert the migration by creating jobs in rural areas, providing better health care and establishing colleges and universities
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Also
 by encouraging investors to promote jobs in rural areas will turn the fate of the village people's lives. The conclusion is urbanisation is beneficial if it's in the
check point
a place (as at a frontier) where travellers are stopped for inspection and clearance
checkpoint
. By taking all the measures mentioned above will make the country a better place to live and thrive.

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