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Some people fail in school, but end up being successful in life. why do you think that is the case. what isn the most importing thing to do succeed in life?

#people #school #life #case #isn
The education it’s not same for all of us.For the most people, if we want to successful in
in
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In
 the rest of
life
 we have to pass the school with excellent diploma.
However
, as we know it
the
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The
 diploma it’s not enough just for us.
Thus
, we
be
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are
 able to see some individuals more than
succeed
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Succeed
 than we thought. In my opinion, the
life
 is not the same which we learned at the university.In the social
media we
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media, we
 can see a lot of different sample if we search it.
This
people might be not
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person might not be
person might be not
 perfect in their education
life
.
Moreover that’s
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Moreover, that’s
 not mean they are unsuccessful because of the disappointed at university. They have
such
 a perfect
sides maybe
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sides, maybe
side maybe
side side maybe
 you don’t know.
On the other hand
, they
have increasing
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have increased
 occupation
life
 after the school.
Therefore
,
my
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 consider the education is mean not just a lecture.It’s content of the
life
, experience, sport, music and art.In
this
conditions
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condition
, just the good grade nothing without the other affairs. In conclusion, we will must to
developing
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develop
 our talents while going to school. Which talents
could be help
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could help
could be helped
 us for the perfect private and the job
life
.According to me, that
must
used to form the superlative
most
 vital issue for victorious living.The
life
 has a
such
 a different things for each other.Find it, learn it and improving it.
That is
 a key of
succeed
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succeeding
life
.When you are
doing that
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doing, that
 one, everything gonna be calmly for our
life
.Just we need to encourage for
reveal
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revealing
 our talent.
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