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some sporting events famous it is negative impact or positive give your opinion

#events #impact
Sporting
events
 are very important activities
of
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in
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person’s
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a person’s
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 life. But some
events
 are more popular other than those sports
events
 has involve a high amount of money. It is a positive trend if all
events
 are equally important
than
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then
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 people will not have much interest in these
events
To begin
with
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 sporting
events
 is good
of
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for
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 the
country
's development and player get
good
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a good
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 opportunity to show their talent in front of people.
Moreover
, some international
events
 build a better understanding
among
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between
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countries and their relation, if
players
 meet with
players
of
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from
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 other the
country
 they can share their
experience
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experiences
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.
Events
 provide
chance
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a chance
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to
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for
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 a new generation to build confidence, they play outside of the
country
,
they
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and they
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 get to know about other
players
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players'
player's
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technique
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techniques
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.
Furthermore
, sporting
events
 like
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the Olympic
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Olympic
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Olympics
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and, world
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, world
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the World
cup
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Cup
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 they all are the most important
events
 and
organise
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are organised
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 after some years, but they are
most
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the most
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 popular in every
the
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apply
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country
if
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of
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 the world because of their values.
In addition
, some sports are popular because
of
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apply
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they are dangerous,
players
 play these
game
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games
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with name
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name
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names
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 and fame In conclusion, sporting
events
very
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are very
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 important
of
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for
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 the
country
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country's
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 development or player boost their confidence
as well as
 names and fame
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