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Some people think that having people from different nationalities and cultural background living together in the same country makes the country develop faster. Do you agree?

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Certain individuals believe that people from various cultural communities and countries working collectively in the one nation which leads to development
in particular
 cities within no time. I believe
with
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in
this
 statement because society gives opportunity to skilled persons and
mutiple
having or involving or consisting of more than one part or entity or individual
multiple
 minds involving in improving the task achievement in one place. These days various states are attracting multi talented individuals by providing various benefits
in
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In
 the area and work policies. Experts in various fields are leaving their own land and working
for
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in
 other developing countries with great salaries and living happy life.
For example
, many countries like the USA, Canada and Australia are following
this
 method to develop their economy and GDP in IT, medical and engineering domain, and now
UK
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the UK
 is following
this
 same step. Many of my friends and relatives are already working
their
in or at that place
there
 for handsome salary and enjoying the benefits. Especially from Asian Continent like India and China, experienced workers are moving to
other
any of various alternatives; some other
another
countries
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Countries
 to improve their knowledge and
life style
a manner of living that reflects the person's values and attitudes
lifestyle
.
Although
 countries keep eligibility standards for the immigrants to satisfy the conditions. Several minds work on specific project to develop which does not have
mistake
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mistakenly
 because they all are skilled
in particular
 field which brings gradual growth in the countries in various areas. In conclusion, people struggle working
for
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in
 other countries by leaving their families behind
and
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And
 taking handsome salary. I assert
this
 is
major cause
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a major cause
the major cause
 for the development of the several
countries
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Countries
 increasing their revenue and economy.

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