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People should follow the customs and traditions when people start to live in a new country. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, a large number of citizens become immigrants due to the search of rich, secure, and comfortable life in other developed nations with different customs and traditions. While many admit that people should adopt new
country
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’s rules and conventions when they intended to settle there, I strongly agree with
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 idea because of several benefits and problems that people can face with them. Disobeying and unconsciousness about host
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’s cultures and traditions causes problems to the immigrants.
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, the refusal to adapt to host environment would create a cultural barrier for immigrants.
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 leads to social isolation, which has negative influences on people’s lives.
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, it is logical that limited knowledge of local customs may result in
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 illegal actions in the host
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 and make local people
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, in Singapore, one of the cleanest countries in Asia, local residents consider anyone dirty and ill-mannered if they litter the street or spit gum in the public. Newcomers can gain some benefits if they adopt the customs and traditions of a new
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. One benefit is that if immigrants behave in accordance with the local norms, they will be accepted easily by local inhabitants, and
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, they can receive respects and affections as well as some help from the local.
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, when the enterprises want to expand their production in a new
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, they must be aware of business practice there, which provides them with useful information to maximize profits. Another benefit is that newcomers might gain the richness of knowledge by virtue of the local customs and traditions, which enables them to actively participate in the activities of the community.
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 many festivals, people are able to participate freely and feel harmonious like their own
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. In conclusion, I would argue that people who dwell in a new
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 should follow the customs and traditions which local people observe.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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