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Small businesses should avoid recruiting young women who do not have their own family in order to avoid paying maternity leave later on. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is argued that small workplaces should not take single
gilrs
a young woman
girls
 to a
work
 because of not give them
money
 when the go to maternity. I disagree with
this
 statement, because I think they must look at is
this
 person talented, has she
education
Suggestion
educated
, is
sho
place (seeds) in or on the ground for future growth
sow
productivity
 in
work
 and other factors. I think
first
 think in what we must give
attetion
Suggestion
attention
 is the education of the worker, because if she have education and skills in the direction of
businees
a commercial or industrial enterprise and the people who constitute it
business
 she will bring to
this
businesses
Suggestion
business
 a lot of
money
 and the introduction of the
money
 to
this
plase
a point located with respect to surface features of some region
place
 will be more than maternity
money
. And addition to it I Think that single women have more time to the
work
with
Suggestion
by
 comparing the woman with family, so her
productivity
 is more than
woman
Suggestion
a woman
women
 with the
famile
a social unit living together
family
familiar
female
. For
examle
an item of information that is typical of a class or group
example
, academic research
showen
the display of a motion picture
showing
shown
 that
productivity
 of single girl 32% than
woman
Suggestion
the woman
a woman
women
 with the family. Another
fator
anything that contributes causally to a result
factor
feather
feature
 in which head of small
businesses
Suggestion
business
lider
a person who rules or guides or inspires others
leader
letter
lender
 should give
attetion
Suggestion
attention
 is
experience
Suggestion
an experience
 of
worker
Suggestion
the worker
. I think with increasing of
pracric
a customary way of operation or behavior
practice
 of
work
Suggestion
workers
 rise her
productivity
 to the
businisess
a commercial or industrial enterprise and the people who constitute it
business
 and
respectivly
in the order given
respectively
 the
money
 which she
earn
Suggestion
earns
. In
conclucion
a position or opinion or judgment reached after consideration
conclusion
conclusions
, I would say that
with
Suggestion
by
 giving chance
them they
Accept comma addition
them, they
 do not lose
anyrhink
an indefinite thing
anything
 but can earn more
money
.

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