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Wealth does not necessarily guaranty happiness. To what extent do you agree with this statement.

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 and being content with oneself is a very rare commodity. Being wealthy cannot
guaranty
give surety or assume responsibility
guarantee
 peace of mind with oneself and ultimately, the world in general. I strongly agree that being able to afford the finer things in
life
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 will not necessarily guaranty contentment and
happiness
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, due to the fact that not everything in
life
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 can be bought with
money
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. People often times say “Wealth cannot buy you
happiness
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, but it can buy you things that will make you happy”.
Well
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Well, this
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 is quite accurate;
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however there
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however, there
 are certain amenities in
life
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 that
money
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 cannot buy. Wealth can neither cure
diseases nor
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diseases, nor
 depression. The rate of suicide among celebrities and as well as wealthy individuals in the United States has drastically increased since the 19th century. More and more stars are either being diagnosed with severe depression, with some of them eventually taking their lives. A recent research shows that out of the 35 percent of reported suicide cases in 2018, 20 percent of them were well known celebrities and individuals.
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, we can summarise, that
money
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 cannot buy good health and even the best state of mind.
Happiness
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 can take the form of anything. Some people might describe
happiness
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 as getting admission to top Ivy League schools and colleges in the world.
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,
money
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 can neither secure a spot there, nor, can it buy you one. Recently in
top celebrity news
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the top celebrity news
, Felicity Hoffman, a well-known rich and established actress from the United States, was found guilty of trying to bribe her daughter’s way into a top Ivy League college. She was recently sentenced to jail for two weeks, and her daughter, was expelled from the school.
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 is a classic case and
example
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the example
an example
 of a mother trying to buy her daughter’s
happiness
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 and being punished for it. To recapitulate, I strongly agree that yes,
money
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 can buy every materialistic thing needed in
life
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,
however
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, it cannot buy contentment and
happiness
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:
such
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 as good health and sound state of mind.
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