You are going to another country to study. You would like to do a part-time job while you are studying, so you want to ask a friend who lives there for some help. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter, give details of your study plans explain why you want to get a part-time job suggest how your friend could help you find a job

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Dear Susan, I'

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excited to tell you that I'

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coming to Canada for doing

Masters

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in Business Administration. As the studies are too expensive there, I would like to do some part-time

job

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, so that I can bear my expenses and manage to submit my college fees easily. As I'

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totally new to that country, I would be very grateful if you could help me to find a

job

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. My course is starting from March 2020 onwards, so I would like to get a

job

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by April.

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, my classes are from Monday to Saturday and I'll get free by 3pm. My college

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Toronto in Washington Street, so, I want

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job

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near my college so that I can easily manage to do 3-4 hours

job

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and

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study for my exams as well. I'

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comfortable with any

job

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as it pays me well for 3-4 hours.

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, I would like to work for 7 days and can

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manage to give extra hours on Sundays. I'

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sure you know the city really well, so you can easily help me out to find a good

job

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. I'll be landing in Canada in the

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week of

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, will see you soon. Take care Alex

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

firstly
secondly
thirdly
in additional
moreover
also
for example
for instance
therefore
however
although
even though
despite

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Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
2
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 6.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

6 paragraphs

205 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

Educational aspirations
Work experience
Financial independence
Resume (or CV)
Local job market
International student
Legal requirements
Student work permit
Employment trends
Time management
Networking
A part-time position
Balance studies and work
Job hunting strategies

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