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The qualities and skills that a person requires to become successful in today’s world cannot be learned at a university or any other academic institution. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In today's
world there
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world, there
 is so much importance has been given to the successful people. Victorious people are revered across the globe for their talent and dedication.
Moreover successful
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Moreover, successful
 individuals have certain personality traits like intelligence
,
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,
smartwork
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smart work
, dedication and grasp things quickly makes them
standout
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stand out
of
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by
from
 their peers.
However there
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However, there
 are some which can be learned through academics only.
For
instance health
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instance, health
 care professionals can
learn
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Learn
 medicine by studying in a medical college only. So colleges or universities
plays
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play
 a vital role in the life of successful
acheivers
a person with a record of successes
achievers
. Through proper education one can
acheive
to gain with effort
achieve
 their goals in
a
Suggestion
an
 easy way. On the flip side there are other kind of people who taste success without attending any college or
univeristy
the body of faculty and students at a university
university
. Warren Buffer
,
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,
a successful
stoke
the capital raised by a corporation through the issue of shares entitling holders to an ownership interest (equity)
stock
 broker and
enterpreneur
someone who organizes a business venture and assumes the risk for it
entrepreneur
 had never attended any
school but
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school, but
 still thrives in life and appeared as a role model to other
enterpreneurs
someone who organizes a business venture and assumes the risk for it
entrepreneurs
enterprises
. So there is no
gaurentee
give surety or assume responsibility
guarantee
 that people who have superior educational qualification only prospered in their
carrer
the particular occupation for which you are trained
career
careers
carrier
.
Coming to conclusion
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Coming to a conclusion
, there is
eveidence
your basis for belief or disbelief; knowledge on which to base belief
evidence
 of people who are successful in either way
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
.e.
with
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With
 or without having
a
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an
 education.
Certificate
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The certificate
A certificate
 is merely a representation of the knowledge acquired by the people in
studies
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the studies
.
Finally
, it's completely based on the personality traits of the individual which leads them in a glowing path.
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