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Nowadays schools should not use textbooks because children get bored with books. Using games, computers and TV is a better way to give them new information and knowledge. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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In
this
 modern era, students do not fond of hard copy study material, so it is thought by many that books should not be used in the educational institutes. It is considered that modes of e-education are more appropriate method to educate them in an interesting way. I do not completely agree with the latter persuasion and hold the view that there should be a proper balance between the both approaches. In the given essay, I will explain the reason of my contemplation that why I am partially agreed.
To begin
 with, the conventional method of studying is in continuation for many years.
Therefore
, the benefits behind teaching in the books are manifold
such
 as to learn creative writing, to make notes conveniently and avoidance of harmful effects of being in front of the screen all the time while studying.
For instance
, one of niece used to learn everything through internet or televisions.
Consequently
, her eyesight has become weak, and she wears contact lenses now.
On the other hand
, today's generation have become immensely smart and to make them learn practically, it is essential to show them the exact pictures of the topic what they read so that they can co-relate things better.
Therefore
, in
this
 situation to use computers and teaching via games have become indispensable.
For example
, my son knows more than me when I was
of
Suggestion
about
 his age as he has smart classes in his school, and whatever it is taught in his class, he can experience it due to visual effects. In conclusion,
although
 it is true that children feel lethargic to learn from their textbooks, there are significant benefits of learning from the books.
However
, to make them smarter, it is
also
 important to attain the information by means of technology.
As a result
, they get instant details on any subject in a fascinating way. After thorough analysis, to rely completely on any single pattern would not suffice the requirement, so it is necessary to use both of the methods while teaching to children.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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