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Some parents want their children to read only serious educational books at all times, and they think it is a waste of time to read any entertainments books. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In Society some parents believe that it's good for their children to read academic books than entertainment books. Let us discuss
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 in detail. In my View, academic books are essential for the youngsters to learn proper knowledge.
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it paves golden way for the future of the students.
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, children who
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 a better education can become doctors
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engineers
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HealthCare Professionals etc.But we never
under estimate
assign too low a value to
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 the importance of the entertainment books. Comics provide great relief to the small people from their daily studies.
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 reading
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entertaining books makes younger ones creative. On the flip side, there is another opinion from the parents that reading
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an activity that is diverting and that holds the attention
entertainment
 books is a waste of time. It's acceptable that more time reading fun books becomes a hindrance in the child's
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feel concern or interest
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. So the best way to tackle
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 problem is to allocate at lease an hour a day
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 the young people for reading the books they want. As per University of Waterloo, it's been found that children who enjoy both non-academic and academic books have a huge chance of success in their life. The conclusion is if parents make childhood a more memorable to their offsprings by encouraging them to maintain a balance between studies and comics.
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