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Some people say that protecting the environment is the government’s responsibility. Others believe that every individual should be responsible for it. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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overnment
Suggestion
Government
should shoulder the responsibility of preserving the
environment
 or each person is responsible one. From my standpoint, it will be more beneficial if both the country’s authorities and individuals share the responsibility. On the one hand, the government may play a pivotal role in maintaining the
environment
 safe and healthy. It is authorities that should introduce the legislation in order to mitigate environmental problems,
such
 as air pollution and more. To illustrate, there should be some laws encouraging factories to move to the country sides rather than staying in c
ities.
Suggestion
the cities
This
 could help urban areas to be
further
 protected from the poisonous fumes, which are always discharged from firms. Another prominent role the government could play would be creating TV programs to educate citizens, and to persuade them to care the nature more. Being informed of the consequences of their activities, individuals may e
ndeavor
a purposeful or industrious undertaking (especially one that requires effort or boldness)
endeavour
to alter their ways, to avoid harming the
environment
.
On the other hand
, it is undeniable that each person can play an important role in protecting their own n
eighborhood.
a surrounding or nearby region
neighbourhood
neighbourhoods
 Cars are considered to be a major source of air pollution. Their exhaust gases contaminate the air, ranging from carbon dioxide to u
nburnt
carbon.
Therefore
, by using their own vehicles only in rare cases, people would be able to protect the
environment
. Another opportunity available to individuals is recycling. By stopping plastic waste from entering and contaminating waterways people are able to conserve drinkable water and its inhabitants. In conclusion, due to the large amount of work involved, mobilising all the possible forces is a more sensible approach. It is,
therefore
, likely that joint efforts of both the governments and their citizens would result in the most effective way of preserving the
environment
.
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