Some believe that modern technology is increasing the gap between rich and poor people, while others disagree. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Technology has brought significant changes in the society. Certain people believe that technical knowledge is only the reason of creating distance between poor and rich people.
However
, others do not agree with
this
statement. I would put forth my points about these two different opinions. To embark with, high technology is
positive development
Suggestion
a positive development
that brings people together.
For instance
, computers and different kinds of websites had turned
this
world
in to
expresses motion to a point on, or within, something
into
a small global village.
Moreover
, it advances industrial revolution that
really increase
Suggestion
really increases
has really increased
the
evonomy
the system of production and distribution and consumption
economy
of
nation
Suggestion
the nation
a nation
nations
.
For example
machinery like
airplanes
, telephones, change the world and make it easy to travel and talk to
whole
Suggestion
the whole
of the world. Due to
this
, many people are able to expand their business to different countries and became successful in their life.
On the other hand
, some people argue that because of
tecnical
of or relating to technique or proficiency in a practical skill
technical
advancement poor
Accept comma addition
advancement, poor
peole
(plural) any group of human beings (men or women or children) collectively
people
becoming poorer and rich
are becoming
Suggestion
is becoming
more richer in society. Somehow it is true because poor
peole
(plural) any group of human beings (men or women or children) collectively
people
pole
Poole
does not have
Suggestion
do not have
money to use new machines and they are treated like slaves in industries. To operate advanced machinery
,
Accept space
,
number
Suggestion
a number
the number
of skills are required and poor people do not have those abilities as of lack of education.
Also
, they are not getting enough pay as they are not intelligent. Business man
have
Suggestion
has
negative thinking about poor people and they thought that they are less
valuable in company
Suggestion
valuable company
and they can throw them out from company if they will talk against the owner.
in
Suggestion
In
a nutshell, believe that every rose has thorns. According to me technology has great benefits for society.
Expertes
Suggestion
Experts
said that if you born in
poor family
Suggestion
a poor family
that is
your
luck but
Accept comma addition
luck, but
if you die in
poor family
Suggestion
a poor family
that is
your choice. So people can be rich by using their skills in modern technology.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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