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The graph below shows the differences in wheat exports over three different areas.

The graph below shows the differences in wheat exports over three different areas.
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The line graph compares three regions in terms of
exports
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 of
wheat
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 between 1985 and 1990.
Overall
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, the three regions experienced different trends in the time period.
While
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 the
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 export in Canada and European countries rose with some fluctuations, the export in Australia fell over time.As the graph shows, Australia's
wheat
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 export figure started at 15
million
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tons
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 in 1985 followed by a small increase to around 16
million
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tons
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 in 1986.
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,
it
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 declined steadily until
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 fell to just over 10
million
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tons
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 in 1990. Regarding Canada's
exports
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, in 1985 they shipped approximately 19
million
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tons
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 of
wheat
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.
This
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 figure fell to about 17
million
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 in 1986, but
then
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 their
exports
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 experienced considerable growth to 25
million
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tons
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 in 1988.
Afterward
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, the figure plunged to below 15
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 in 1989, but
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subsequently
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 rose to just under 20
million
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 in 1990.
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,
the
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wheat
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exports
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 from the European Community experienced an increase in the
six year
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 period. In 1985, nearly 16
million
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tons
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 were exported,but
this
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 number fell to about 14
million
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 in 1986.
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, the
exports
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 increased to exactly 15
million
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tons
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 in 1987 and 1988 before witnessing steady growth to 19
million
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 and 21
million
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tons
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 in 1989 and 1990, respectively.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 80%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words exports, wheat, million, tons with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fell" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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