In some countries the average weight of people is increasing and their levels of fitness are decreasing. what do you think are the cause of these problems and what measures could be taken to solve them?

There is no gainsaying
fact
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the fact
that in
modern era
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the modern era
a modern era
, obesity is a fountainhead problem. In few nations the level of individuals who suffer from overweight, are more
instead
of their healthy life.
there
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There
are several views behind
this
statement which I will discuss in following paragraphs. On the one hand
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,
there are
various cause
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various causes
behind
this
monstrous problem.
First
and foremost, in these days obesity is a rampant cause in between individuals and children, because mostly they depend upon
fastfood
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fast food
instead
of fresh and
health
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healthy
food. They give more preference to eat pizza
,
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,
burger and so on. Apart from
this
,
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,
today individuals do those
type
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types
of
jobswhere
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jobs where
they have to sit for
long time
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a long time
in front of technical things
instead
of doing manual works
.
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.
Consequently
, they face some healthy malady
es
have the quality of being; (copula, used with an adjective or a predicate noun)
is
such
as obesity and
diabetices
a polygenic disease characterized by abnormally high glucose levels in the blood; any of several metabolic disorders marked by excessive urination and persistent thirst
diabetes
. On the flip side, some views help to solve these type of root cause.
First
of all, people should avoid eating fast food and maintain their own healthy diets. Government should enact laws regarding those
type
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types
of restaurants which use
more oily
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more oil
and unhealthy ingredients for food
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.
Moreover
, people should save some time for morning walks as well as other physical activities.
As a result
, they cannot face problems to maintain their healthy lifestyle. In sum and substance, having mulled over aforementioned information, it is quite evident that
although
overweight is
chief problem
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the chief problem
for some cities, it can be solved with relative steps which have to put by both individuals and government.

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