More and more qualified people are moving from poor to rich countries to fill vacancies in specialist areas like engineering, computing and medicine. Some people believe that by encouraging the movement of such people, rich countries are stealing from poor countries. Others feel that this is only part of the natural movement of workers around the world. Do you agree or disagree?

Actually, I believe I can be in
this
qualified people category. Because I am a Manufacturing Engineer and I am looking master programmes in other country and
after
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I will start seeking
job
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on there. I believe that
,
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it is not good for poor
countries
but these
countries
must do something to keep their specialist. For example in my country even
you
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if you
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are qualified
on
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some area maybe you can not find any
job
. Even
you
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if you
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find any
job
your salary is not fair enough for your skills and maybe you can not live alone with
this
salary. When it
is happened
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, people are looking to do something else. Of
course
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course,
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it is not all about money but when your life quality is low, you can not gonna be happy so easily. In some poor
countries
, people are working more than fifty-five hours and six days
in
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a week. When you work six days
in
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a week you will have very
small
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time to rest your mind and body. For these areas mind health is so important. When your mind is not ready for next week you can not give one hundred
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yourself for
job
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the job
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. But rich
countries
knows
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that and they are always thinking
how
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about how
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can we make them more
confortable
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comfortable
. I support that, these movements are making rich
countries
more richer and poor
countries
more poor. I
am strongly agree
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with “
this
is only part of the natural movement of workers alone the world”.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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