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When a new town is planned, it is more important to develop public parks and sports facilities than shopping centers for people to spend their free time in. To what extent do agree or disagree?

#town #parks #sports #facilities #centers #people #time
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In
early stages
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the early stages
 of town planning, it is critical to build separate green areas and sports complexes in lieu of giving importance to build markets for masses to utilize their
liesure
time available for ease and relaxation
leisure
 time. In my opinion, I completely agree that these facilities are indispensable for a healthy community. One of the main reasons for not supporting building shops for purchasing is that it can be helpful to reduce consumerism in the future.
In other words
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, less number of the shopping
center
an area that is approximately central within some larger region
centre
 means less number of the customers will be lured by them.
This
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 will result in reduction of garbage
as a result
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 of reduced usage of commodities. Another good reason to promote
developing
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the development
development
 of
centers
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Centers
centres
 for the
excercises
the activity of exerting your muscles in various ways to keep fit
exercises
 and the greenery while making new areas is that it will
pursude
win approval or support for
persuade
pursue
community
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the community
 to pursue healthy activities.
For instance
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,
last
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 year a survey conducted by Oxford university stated that the residents of the cities having a huge number of gymnasiums generally live a healthy life because they develop a
habbit
an established custom
habit
 of
excercise
the activity of exerting your muscles in various ways to keep fit
exercise
 due to easy
accessibilty
the quality of being at hand when needed
accessibility
 of these services in close proximity.
Furthermore
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, it is vital to control budget in
this
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 era of rising inflation and it is the best way to avoid
pursuading
(law) the institution of a sequence of steps by which legal judgments are invoked
proceeding
 market tactics by traders. If there is no market available in
vicinity
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the vicinity
 of house,
inhabitants
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the inhabitants
 of that specific area will not go to buy unnecessary items. In conclusion,
although
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 people argue for having
super markets
a large self-service grocery store selling groceries and dairy products and household goods
supermarkets
 to spend off time, I believe that policy makers must put efforts to make
availabilty
Suggestion
the availability
availability
 of parks.
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