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More and more developing countries are expanding their tourist industries. Why is this? Is it a negative or a positive development?

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Tourism
 is on the rise in many developing nations. It is because
number
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the number
a number
 of tourists
helps
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help
 in preserving the culture and infrastructure of the state. I believe that, rise in
tourism
 has
it
it is
it's
 own benefits
,
Accept space
,
as the employment rate of the
country
 goes up as well.
This
 is to say that, tourist industry helps in
preservation
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the preservation
 of the
country
’s traditions and monuments. As, the
number
 of tourists increases, more amount of money is gained which can be used in the maintenance of the old and worn buildings and infrastructure of the state, like roads and airports.
For example
, according to a report of The Times newspaper, Kerela’s cultural economy completely depends upon the
tourism
 of the
country
.
In other words
 the major advantage
from
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of
for
tourism
 is that, a huge amount of people get employment.
This
 is because with
rise
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a rise
 in
travel industry
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the travel industry
 the demand for new services
also
 increase,
thus
 jobs like travel guides, hotel industry, in-house accommodations like
airbnb
relating to or concerned with a city or densely populated area
urban
, grow up which helps people earn money from travellers.
For instance
, in a recent survey in Malaysia, it was found that employment rate has boosted from 30% to 75% in
last
 3 years due to increase in the
number
 of tourists in the
country
. To conclude
,
Accept space
,
many nations are upgrading their travel industries, as
tourism
 plays a vital role in maintaining the
ethinicity
undisputed credibility
authenticity
 and old monuments of the nation.
This
 is a positive development, as more and more
number
 of jobs are created by
increase
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an increase
the increase
 in the amount of visitors in the
country
.

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