You are about to move to an English-speaking country to study. You have a friend living there and you want to find a part-time job. Write a letter to your friend - Explaining your scholar plans, - Your reasons to get a part-time job, - Suggest how he/she can help you finding a job.

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Dear Dave, Hope
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letter finds you in radiant health and the best of spirit. I am writing
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letter to ask you a favour of finding
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part-time employment for me in your city of residence. Let me explain it in a detail. I'm
realy
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really

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excited to tell you that I got admission in my desired discipline of management
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a
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university of Brisbane in Australia. Another thing to cheer about is that it is a
fully funded
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programe
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programme
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there will be no
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fee, I have to pay for a hostel and a mess. In order to pay charges for these, I'm looking for some temporary work.
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I
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will be helpful for me to know about local culture and enhance
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skills. I hope you will be able to talk with your local friends to search
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opportunity for me. Another thing you could do is to apply online and arrange an interview in advance. Hope to see you soon! Yours lovingly, Farrukh
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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