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Some people think that young people should choose their professions themselves. Other believe that their parents should choose for them. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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There is an argument exists among the people that children should choose their occupation as they wish, opposed to their parent's wish. In my view, it's good for the younger generation to select
profession
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 based on their
instict
inborn pattern of behavior often responsive to specific stimuli
instinct
 along with the parent's guidance. Let us
dicuss
to consider or examine in speech or writing
discuss
 about the both views in the
further
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 paragraphs.
Firstly
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, there is a notion that elders have enormous experience about various occupations as they have already passed half of their age.
Furthermore
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, based on their personal experience they are mentoring their offsprings about which job is to choose. Take an instance,
father
Suggestion
a father
 who is a daily labour know more about the hardships involved in the
profession
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 and would like his son to refrain by taking the daily labour job.
In addition
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 to
this
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, there is a pressure from the society and relatives.
However
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, we cannot be completely assertive about the
elders
Suggestion
elder's
 opinion. Youth
also
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 have a different perception and
decission
the act of making up your mind about something
decision
deception
decisions
 about the
profession
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 they would like to choose. To
demonstarte
give an exhibition of to an interested audience
demonstrate
 more, a young
gradute
receive an academic degree upon completion of one's studies
graduate
 from the
University whose
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University, whose
 father is a professor, like to become a civil servant
instead
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 of taking his father's occupation.
we
Suggestion
We
 will welcome these kind of
decissions
Suggestion
Decision
Decissions
 as it paves a golden way for the future of a graduate.
Furthermore
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, youth plays a vital role in shaping the society and one should respect their opinions. The conclusion is, people must choose the
profession
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 they would like, but considering their
parents
Suggestion
parents'
 advice is recommended. In
this
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 way, both the parents and offsprings are cheerful and the family is in the same phase.
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