Some people think that art is essential subject for children at school while others think it is a waste of time. Discuss both sides and give your opinion

A few people believe that an
art
Is
futile
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futile, however
however
others believe that it is an important
subject
at
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of
preliminary class
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a preliminary class
of
school
. In my opinion
art
plays
significant role
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a significant role
in
development
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the development
of children because it enhances child imagination power, thinking capacity and additional skill which will facilitate in participating in competition and will bring laurel to the
school
if become triumphant so must be taught in
school
with full valour. Now a days competition is stiff in Job market pattern of selection has drastically changed and maximum candidates has similar education and experience
level but
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level, but
if candidates has expertise in arts
then
probability of his/her attaining a job is high reasons possessing skilled which others are lacking, company will
cherrypicked
this
job aspirants on expectation that imagination skilled helps in making faster decision in organisation it shows here that if he pursued
art
in childhood it means his future will be stable and sound. Bundle of stalwart in
arts
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the arts
are remembered
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is remembered
for their mesmerising and soulful work and their painting are being sold in millions
such
as Picaso, MF Hussain etc. Reminiscence of painting for these legendary
are
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is
soothing and full of gratification. Business tycoons are showing interest to buy
eye catching painting
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an eye catching painting
the eye catching painting
this
way money
also
generating. In
school
twice in a week
art
class should be continued role of teachers are unflinching and attachment with students deeply coordinated its dry
subject
in some period student may lose
zeal
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the zeal
to attend the class.
Art
is somehow boring
subject
for some students and not paying attention, dedication is lacking so here
school
faculties will have
herculean task
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a Herculean task
Herculean task
to attract attention of stoic student. What teachers
has
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have
to do here to assemble students is single classroom and elaborates the benefits of
art
its future and
carrier
the particular occupation for which you are trained
career
. Scope is less in
art
and here government should promote
art
and culture as it represent
India rich heritage
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an India rich heritage
. Abundant of luminaries in
art
has been passed
away
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away, however
however
despite their significant role in cultivating the interest of
this
subject
amongst student we forget to remember in their death anniversary and never pay homage seriously
this
is deplorable and depicting antipathy. In
conclusion I
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conclusion, I
would like to say that
art
should be paid special attention.
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