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Digital communication technology, such as email, instant messaging and social media, has improved communication and connections between people. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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It is indeed true that in the modern era of technology nowadays people easily interact with people through email, messages and social apps. I strongly agree with
this
 viewpoint and it can be
discussed in the
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discussed further in the
further
 paragraph. Focusing on communication, people use social media to interact with others rather than face to face conversation because of the advancement of technology the conversation becomes faster than ancient times,
for instance
, people get crucial information through the email, YouTube etc.
Secondly
, many people choose to connect with social media to eradicate of their loneliness and they chat with their social friends,
for example
, 73%, of people have their account on Facebook, Instagram, Twitter because of that they interact with the people who even don't know them
then
 they start chatting with each other and
then
 become
good friend
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good friends
a good friend
.
In addition
,
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,
 at present people have a haptic schedule that's why they don't have that much time to meet their relatives so they used the
whats
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what's
 app, Facebook to join with each other and easily communicate with each other. To add another reason, layman fewer efforts to touch with their close ones, they don't need to be met every day,
such
 as many relationships
start
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starts
 on Facebook both people belongs from different countries and understand one another through the cyber network.
Moreover
, easily sold the products on an international
level which
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level, which
 expand their business, in
this
 case,
levis
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the leaves
leaves
 expand their business through the Flipkart, Amazon etc. To conclude and it can be eventually started that because of lack of time and advancements of technology
people mostly
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people, mostly
 prefer to use social media to connect with each other.
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