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Some people think that girls should take husband’s name after marriage while others feel that they should not follow this age old tradition. What is your opinion?

#people #girls #husband’s #name #marriage #age #tradition
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ew hundred years
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A few hundred years
Few hundred years
ago, things were straightforward, when a man and a
woman
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 got married, the wife changed her
surname
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 to that of her
husband
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's
name
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. But nowadays they are matters of concern. I completely disagree with changing
woman
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's
surname
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, as I see that as a transfer of subservience from father to
husband
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, and losing women's identities to that of men's.
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, in the internet age, all the work that the
woman
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 did under her previous
name
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 is not going to show up in google search anymore. If someone is trying to track her down for job opportunities with the previous
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,
then
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 it will be a tough time in finding hassles which include changing in all government records, causing more burden.
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 implicitly imposes her to lose her identity personally and
also
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 professionally.
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, when it comes to marriage, it is very apparent that the transformation is imposed mainly on women. She is expected to relocate to her
husband
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's place, leaving her family, job and everything behind. If a
woman
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 refuses to take up the
change
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, she will be considered as violating the tradition and not respecting the family and their culture. Women are expected to be communal, sacrificing their individual interests to the well-being of the family and having the
husband
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's
name
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 as a
surname
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 can be seen as selfish and forcing them to be the
change
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. It may seem easier to ask men to
change
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 their
surname
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 according to that of women, but it is always an invisible option and placing the burden entirely on the women to take up the
change
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. To conclude, having a
surname
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 of
husband
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’s is solely a
woman
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's decision. The family should respect the women's individuality and should not run behind the tag of owning. In my opinion, people should consider marriage is all about the connection of two hearts, not a
name
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 changing event.
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