Countries with long working days are more successful economically, but there are some negative social consequences. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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IT IS OFTEN SAID THAT THERE BSHOULD BE BALANCE IN BETWEEN PERSONAL AND PROFESSIONAL LIFE. SOME CONSIDERED THAT NATIONS WHO HOLDS A MORE THAN 5 WORKING DAYS HAS A STRONG ECONOMICAL STATUS. BUT, ON THE OTHER SIDE, IT

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AFFECT THE SOCIAL LIFE OF THE FOLKS.

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ESSAY WILL 100% CONCUR WITH THE ABOVE NOTION BECAUSE OF THE NUMEROUS BAD SITUATION COMES DUE TO OVER-WORK WHICH IS DISCUSS BELOW. ON THE ONE HAND, THE NATION HAS TO PAY MORE HEALTH BENEFITS TO THEIR WORKERS AS THEY TEND TO HAVE VARIOUS FITNESS ISSUES

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AS BACK PAIN, MENTAL PROBLEM AND SO ON.

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, THEY DO NOT HAVE ENOUGH TIME TO SPEND WITH THEIR FRIENDS AND FAMILY AND

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, THEY MIGHT BECOME PSYCHOLOGICALLY UNSTABLE.

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AAFECT THE WORK EFFICIENCY AND LESS PROFITS.

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, THE LABOUR AGENCIES OF THE INDI'S REPORT REVEALED THAT70% OF THE PEOPLE REQUIRED MORE HEALTH PLANS BECAUSE OF THE OVERWORKING DAYS.

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, IT IS

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ALOTE A FINACIAL STABILITY FOR ONE'S FAMILY, AS IT PROVIDES A MORE MONWYBY WORKING A LOT.

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, INDIVIDUAL IS ABLE TO FULFILL HIS FAMILY'S NEED AT HIS BEST,

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LEADS TO SECURE FUTURE OF HIS OFFSPRINGS.

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, NOT EVERY INDIVIDUAL WANTS A MONEY, SOME URGE FOR MENTAL PEACE WHOCH ONLY CAN OBTAIN FORM BEING CLOSE WITH LOVED ONES.

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, THE INDIA HAS 6 WORKING DAYS AND

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, EVERYDAYS IS BUSY OF ALMOST 805 OF THE WORKERS AND THEEFORE, THEY LACK SOME LESUIRE TIME TO SPEND. IN CONCLUSION, MORE WORKING DAYS, INDEED STRENGTHEN THE ECONOMY STATUS OF THE NATIONS. BUT, IT IS

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INCREASING THE BURDEN ON THE INDIVIDUAL AND GOVERNMENT AS WELL IN THE MEANS OF WELLNESS.

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, GOVERNMENT SHOULD TAKE ONE'S PERSONAL LIFE IN ASSESST WHILE, SETTING UOP THE IFFICIAL WORKING DAYS SO THAT THE EVERY EMPLOYEES DO NOT HAVE TO COMPROMISE THEIR FREE TIME DUE TO OVERWORK.

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Topic Vocabulary:

correlation
GDP (Gross Domestic Product)
detrimental
stress levels
strain
work-life balance
emerging economies
unsustainable growth
social unrest
productivity tools
government policies
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Countries with long working days are more successful economically, but there are some negative social consequences. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Your opinion

Nowadays, many people choose to be self-employed, rather than to work for a company or organisation. Why might be the case? What could be the advantages of being self-employed?

Fresh water has become a golbal problem for the world.What are the causes of it? what meaaures government and individual should take to resolve to the problem? Give reasons and e.g for your answers

Nowadaysthe student have more opportunity to study abroad. what are the advantages and disadvanteges of this devolopment?

using computers everyday have more negative effects on children than positive. Do you agree or disagree with the notion.

Task 2 It is important for people to take risk, both in their professional lives and their personal lives. Do you think the advantages of taking risk outweigh the disadvantages ?