Nowadays some professions such as doctors, lawyers and engineers are paid much higher than ordinary workers. What do you think of this trend? Are there any jobs which you think should offer higher salaries.

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Some professionals
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as doctors, engineers and lawyers are the most paid ones compared to other normal workers.
Although
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I agree that these jobs deserve high salaries due to their educational background and
also
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their
people in general
they
need in the society, there are
also
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few other professions which should be offered high salaries
such
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as
police
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, military officers and teachers who serves as the
back bones
a central cohesive source of support and stability
backbones
of the nation’s development. When it comes to professions
such
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as doctors and engineers, they spend not only
lot
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a lot
lots
of money and time for their
graduation but
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graduation, but
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put enormous efforts to gain high grades throughout their education. After graduating, these professionals
at
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in
their work place have
lot
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lots
of commitments and they should be available, be conscious and accountable for every situation handled by them.
For example
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, a doctor might get a call any time round the clock to attend emergency cases and
thus
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saves the lives of many critical patients on
daily basis
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a daily basis
.
Hence
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, these employees deserve to be paid well for their hard work and dedication.
However
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, there are
also
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few other jobs who are eligible to get
high
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higher
salaries
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as Teachers, military and
police
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officers. While
police
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and military officers play a major role in protecting and serving the nation all the time, teachers do have a great impact on
student’s personality
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the student’s personality
and development apart from teaching them the subject.
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, most of the professions now are previously students who were taught and got inspired by their teachers.
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, these professionals
also
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should be paid
generous amount
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a generous amount
of money to encourage them to put more efforts in building a better nation. To summarise, while it is undeniable fact that doctors and engineers should be paid with higher salaries, it is equally important to consider few other professions
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as teachers,
police
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and military officers due to their constant efforts for a remarkable change in the society.
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A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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