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In some countries, most people prefer to rent their homes rather than buying them. Whare are the advantages and disadvantages of renting a home?

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It is often seen that people are choosing
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rent
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renting
 option to
live especially
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live, especially
 in metro cities rather than owning the
house
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.
Although
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 there is a myriad reason behind
this
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 decision, the main cause is uncontrolled property price. I will discuss some advantages and disadvantages in the following paragraph.
First
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 of all, buying a new home is not a cup of tea for middle-class people so they have to choose
rant option
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a rant option
rant options
 to live in cities for their jobs or business. The big cities already overcrowded and
gitch
to hook or entangle
hitch
glitch
fetch
. It does not contain enough space to accommodate
such
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 a huge amount of people For the instant, 56 percent of the world population
live
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lives
 in cities.
Moreover
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, sometimes, jobs or career growth is not restricted to one or two cities since they are always open
for
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to
 the outside opportunity. In that case, People do not want to block their money for
short time
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a short time
.
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, buying a new home has its own advantages. Nowadays, Property like home,
shop consider
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shop, consider
 as a fruitful long-term investment and help to increase wealth eventually. Own
house
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 can help to avoid the unnecessary bother of renewal the
rent
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 contract and transfer the luggage while the need to change or relocate to new rental properties.
Additionally
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, Own
house
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 can help
to
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with
integral
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integration
 and intellectual development. To conclude,
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advantages
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the advantages
 are definitely overcome the disadvantages, most of the people choose to
leave
inhabit or live in; be an inhabitant of
live
 on
rent
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 due to the costly
house
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. It seems that leaving on
rent
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 is not a case of choice but the choice of comfort.
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