It is inevitable that as technology advances, traditional cultures will be lost. It seems that we cannot have these two things together. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Traditional cultures, at the

present

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presentation

area

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have

inevitable

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inevitably

been an essential part of people's daily life. A lot of people believe that we could protect traditional cultures

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even though in

this

technological society.

However

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some people consider that traditional cultures will be covered by modern technology.

This

essay will argue that traditional cultures will be completely saved. Admittedly,

this

is a

science

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scientific

society with the exponential growth of technological skills. The

majority

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major

reason

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which support traditional cultures will disappear, is digital media technology's

dramatical

of or pertaining to grammar

grammatical

development. It would be far-

feched

go or come after and bring or take back

fetched

faced

that teenagers gradually forget the traditional

festivel

a day or period of time set aside for feasting and celebration

festival

festivals

and celebrity the "digital

festivel

a day or period of time set aside for feasting and celebration

festival

", to exemplify, double eleven shopping

festivel

a day or period of time set aside for feasting and celebration

festival

is the most popularity. They would ignore the traditional

festivel

a day or period of time set aside for feasting and celebration

festival

festivals

and forget

histrical

of or relating to the study of history

historical

hysterical

stories about them, and it should make people thought-provoking.

Nevertheless

this

notion is

biased

having a base

based

on the measuring, ignoring the

realy

the basic unit of money in Brazil; equal to 100 centavos

real

really

fact. There are tow main reasons can proof that traditional cultures would be completely saved.

Firstly

, the government enacts the legislation that schools should pay more attention

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traditional education, which can help children recognize the meaning of traditional cultures.

Besides

, there are a variety of charitable

orgnizations

a group of people who work together

organizations

organisations

organization

to give lectures and some other activities to prevent the

diappearence

the act of leaving secretly or without explanation

disappearance

tradition

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traditional

Secondly

, traditional cultures like a bond to connect different generations. There some

tradition

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traditional

knowlege

the psychological result of perception and learning and reasoning

knowledge

, which parents teach their child, are

came

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coming

from

grand-generation

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the grand - generation

grand - generations

a grand - generation

Off-springs

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Offspring

will inherit

these knowledge

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this knowledge

until they teach their own child. To sum up.

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seems that traditional cultures are vulnerable and it would be easier replaced by technology. Actually

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traditional cultures are stronger than anything, since the government and people protect it together

to a degree exceeding normal or proper limits

too

far away from extinction.

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It is inevitable that as technology advances, traditional cultures will be lost. It seems that we cannot have these two things together. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Fully explain your ideas

Some species of animals are almost extinct; and many others seem to be fast approaching a similar risk. What are the reasons for this? What should be done to solve this problem?

Some children spend hours every day on their smartphones. Why is this case

Some people fear that technology is gradually taking over control of our lives, while others think that it has led to many positive developments in all aspects of their lives. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both views and give your own opinion. Give reason and examples.

The internet has made traditional libraries unnecessary. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Discuss giving examples from your own knowledge andexperience.