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In some countries, a foreign language is taught in primary schools. Do the advantages of learning a new language over weigh the disadvantages?

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With increasing globalisation, the world is now turning into a global village. Cultural differences are blurring and people are enthusiastic about study, work and sometimes settling down in a foreign country. Observing
this
, schools have started the erudition of foreign languages from elementary level. While some people may find it adverse, I believe that it is a welcome development in
global education system
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the global education system
. Learning new languages at primary level has numerous benefits. One of them is that, children are agile in early age and
hence
 are likely to grasp the complexities of foreign
language
 easily.
This coupled
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This, coupled
 with the expert teaching techniques and modern technology makes
this
 job literally a child’s play. When you learn the
language
 at an early age, you have abundant time to practise and master it
resulting
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results
is resulting
into
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in
 a greater command over
language
. Another benefit is that, it improves
chances
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the chances
 of a promising career for the student. With growing competition, businesses are expanding cross-borders, resulting into employers looking for candidates possessing multi linguistic skills.
Therefore
, along with rendering the pupil with better prospects for
future
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the future
, it
also
 results in an asset for recruiters.
For instance
, Engineers who can speak German and French have better chances of selection in
interview
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an interview
the interview
interviews
 as per a survey conducted by Bloomberg in 2019.
Nevertheless
, those who do not support
this
 idea, argue that children are already burdened with learning
myriad
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a myriad
 of subjects from basic level and inclusion of foreign languages in
curriculum
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the curriculum
 will add fuel to
this
 fire. It may
also
 allow less time for extracurricular activities, impending the physical development of a child.
However
, with friendly teaching methods
such
 education is made easy for the children resulting
into
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in
 learning with fun for them. To deduce, it is my conviction that
benefits
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the benefits
 of learning
new
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a new language
language
 since childhood definitely
overshadows
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overshadow
 its drawbacks and
hence
 must be encouraged.

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