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Shops should give preference in selling local food rather than imported food. Do you agree or disagree?

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It is a matter of debate whether local
food
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 products should be sold or imported ones by the vendors. It would appear that selling of imported meals is more beneficial for both the sellers and the consumers. At the outset,
the wiser
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the wise
 business man is a person who takes care of the needs of his consumers. Owing to global influence, more and more
people of these days
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people these days
 are more interested in imported
food
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. International brand like KFC and Mac D are the example of
this
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 trend.
Also
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, it is because of the quality and uniqueness that could be found in certain imported
food
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 products. So, by selling imported products,
shopkeeper
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the shopkeeper
shopkeepers
 can gain huge benefits, which would not possible by selling only local brands.
Thus
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, local people can enjoy the imported
food
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 just at their nearby market, eventually both consumer and businessmen get
benefits
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the benefits
 of
this
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 selling strategy.
On the other hand
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, distributing only local foods could lead to more competition amongst vendors. Because of its availability local meals could be found everywhere, so it does not add any significance of the particular shop.
For instance
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, Indian traditional
food
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 '
chapatti
a subdivision of a written work; usually numbered and titled
chapter
' is even available at home; so, why would people buy
this
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 product from the seller?
That is
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 the reason that a sense of competition could be increased to sell local products.
Furthermore
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, local
food
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 might be spoiled due to its
excessiveness
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excess
excesses
 storage at the stock, if it does not sell timely.
Hence
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,
government
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the government
 had better export local products
to import
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import
 foreign
food
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 products. To conclude,
this
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 essay discussed the reason why imported
food
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 should be sold
instead
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 of local
food
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. I think
selling
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the selling
 of imported
food
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 is more beneficial for the profit of sellers as well for the sake of
consumer's interest
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the consumer's interest
.

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