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The dangers of smoking are well known, yet many people continue with this habit. What are the causes of this? How can we reduce smoking in the society? Give reasons for your answer, and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Teenage is a blank slate and more
vulenrable
susceptible to attack
vulnerable
 towards
induvidual
a human being
individual
individuals
 freedom to welcome or reject any
such
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 bad
habbits
an established custom
habits
 in our lives without seeking approval from our families or even counting on the side effects sensibly. Rather educating our friend circle on the impacts on our health and
financials
assets in the form of money
finances
financial
 and trauma what
indiviual
a human being
individual
 family may go through just
becuase
for the reason that; on account of
because
 of
this
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 one
habbit
an established custom
habit
, we encourage them
further
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 by participating. That's where the damage goes beyond
control in
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control, in
 society. While putting any efforts to
deaddict
discover or determine the existence, presence, or fact of
detect
dedicate
 the crowd, we need to work on
root level
Suggestion
the root level
.
Focus
Suggestion
The focus
 has to be more towards the inception of
disease
Suggestion
the disease
, than the
symptons
(medicine) any sensation or change in bodily function that is experienced by a patient and is associated with a particular disease
symptoms
symptom
. Smoking and selling smoking
prodcuts
commodities offered for sale
products
 should be banned in and around colleges, public places, hospitals and
hefty penality
Suggestion
a hefty penalty
hefty penalty
 to be imposed.
Campaign
Suggestion
The campaign
 needs to include more informative slogans and commercials across
differnt
unlike in nature or quality or form or degree
different
 channels generally accessible to
mob
Suggestion
the mob
a mob
. The theme should be that, "every life matters!!!". It should depict afterlife of the families
lossin
fail to keep or to maintain; cease to have, either physically or in an abstract sense
losing
g their near ones due to any
such
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habbit
an established custom
habit
s. I have lost my father, and I know the real pain loosing someone in untimely fashion. It's the worst feeling
o
Suggestion
of
n the earth. It's just not loosing our family members, the effect goes to entire living
beings incluin
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beings, including
beings including
g humans, animals and plantations getting affected due to air pollution. We need to initiate
precutionar
taken in advance to protect against possible danger or failure
precautionary
y measures at the earliest.

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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