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Band 2.5

Write an email to the local government in about 150-200 words. Your email should do the following things: •Provide information about where you live. •Explain the problem and how it affects your life. •Suggest a way to solve the problem.

Dear Government Officer, I'm writing to you, in order to express my concerns and make you aware, on series of disturbing incidents that took place at the
night
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time
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inside
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in
 the Edmonton
city
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park
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. My house is located adjoining the
city
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park
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 and I've been residing here for
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 10 years.
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Totaling
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 25 - 30 families residing in
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park's vicinity
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the park's vicinity
. Recently, we have been disturbed by a group of teenagers who are coming at late
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 and partying till dawn
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in
 the
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park
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. They are using sound equipment which amplify the music to a loud noise and it is disturbing our lifestyle, especially sleep. Most of our community members work
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in
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, in day jobs and they certainly need the rest at
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time
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. Not to mention the children who are studying at
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. If I may suggest, having
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 entry
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 and a closing
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 may resolve
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 issue, and if
city
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 council could consider of appointing designated officer for the
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, may certainly reduce the number of
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 incidents. I trust that you would look at
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 issue at your earliest possible and expects a speedy solution. Regards, Kushan

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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