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QUESTION; In recent years, many small local shops have closed because customers travel to large shopping centers or malls to do their shipping. Is this a positive or a negative development? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your knowledge or experience.

#years #shops #customers #travel #centers #malls #development
In recent years, customers are willing to buy
there
of them or themselves
their
 items from large shopping malls,
Therefore many
Accept comma addition
Therefore, many
 small local
shpos
a mercantile establishment for the retail sale of goods or services
shops
 have to close.I think,
this
 is not good for the county, because when we considering about the country, there are lots of people doing lots of small shops
for
Suggestion
of
 living and
aslo
in addition
also
 there are
sompe
quantifier; used with either mass nouns or plural count nouns to indicate an unspecified number or quantity
some
 people who have very good
entrepinuer
someone who organizes a business venture and assumes the risk for it
entrepreneur
 ideas for new business but they do not have lots of money.
there for
Suggestion
Therefor
There for
 they have to start
there
of them or themselves
their
 business from the small shops. If the customers always select larger shops, I think
enterprines
a purposeful or industrious undertaking (especially one that requires effort or boldness)
enterprises
enterprise
 can't build. So it is not
good situation
Suggestion
a good situation
 for the country. So I think, government has to get some
decitions
a line leading to a place or point
directions
 to
avod
stay clear from; keep away from; keep out of the way of someone or something
avoid
afford
 these things
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • community character
  • specialized products
  • homogenized
  • local economy
  • circulating
  • variety
  • convenient
  • social hubs
  • infrastructure
  • traffic congestion
  • pollution
  • energy consumption
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