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Many People like to wear fashionable clothes. Why do you think this is the case Is this a good thing or bad thing.

#people #clothes #case
In
comparation of
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comparison, of
comparison of
cooperation of
computation of
 past, nowadays people have more varieties available in their daily requirements like
cloths
clothing in general
clothes
, food and places to visit. Many individuals prefer to wear trendy garments
as a result
 cloth business attracted concentration of investors across the world. As far as my view is concerned, I would like to favour positive development from the humanity prospects. Most of
public
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the public
 want to buy
latest designs
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the latest designs
 for their impressive looks and many times it satisfies many internal vibrations. Everyone, wants to look different and wants to try
verities in
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verities, in
 designs in daily routine like as traditional cloths in function, formal pairs
at
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of
 office and trousers, jeans and
t-shirts
a close-fitting pullover shirt
T-shirts
otherwise
. In any marriage function specially for the ladies talk of the town
is
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has been
 always
dress
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dressed
 of bride, groom and all guests, as the people who are well dressed get indirect respect and their
well
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good
 dressing sense appreciated by all. In any meeting or function people judge you
first
 from your dressing sense and
then
 by personal discussion or talk, so fashionable cloths provide opportunity for good looking where you go. On the
second
 hand, due to availability of fashionable
cloths
clothing in general
clothes
, different
verities
a collection containing a variety of sorts of things
varieties
 of
cloths
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cloth
 pattern are available in
market
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the market
. Every individual has
different taste
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a different taste
different tastes
 of comfort, some like to wear loose
cloths
clothing in general
clothes
 while many prefer body tight fitting. It is not possible that these days everyone prefer only one type of design as well as in
same color
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the same colour
same colour
. But
reality
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the reality
 is totally different due to eye catching advertisements on television and social media, most of people like to wear
latest designs
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the latest designs
 only as it is the one of the factors of status in society. In conclusion, to satisfy public mentality, designers and shopkeepers are upcoming with new designs and patterns in
garment industry
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the garment industry
. There is nothing wrong to priorities cloths in your day to day life, at the same time plethora options are available in terms of price,
hence
 people can buy similar
cloths
clothing in general
clothes
 from mall, online or road side which provides lowest investment. What I can see for the future, more and more
verities in
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verities, in
 fabrics and stitching patterns will generate more options in the world of fashion.

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